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I moved to this city five years ago
Played it by ear, and went with the flow
The night of this city became lover and foe
With time you’ll learn when to stay or to go

Sunday morning, I was sweeping my floor
Heard the bell ring and saw you at the door
Said you didn’t want to miss me anymore
So you snuck out this morning at quarter past four

Turn round the corner, take the last train home
Take an umbrella and don’t forget your phone
Hurry, my sister, this ain’t a place for you
This city will lie and you’ll believe it’s true

Time might’ve passed but you remember your dreams
Carved into bark and stitched into seams
Now passion and memories lie broken and dead
And you wanted to know, did I, too, forget

Took the trail leading down near the river
To the station in the neighbouring town
The tree we used to climb has withered
And they took the tire swing down

You sit at the table with a cup of tea
Say you expected no different from me
So many things mother wouldn’t want to see
But here I have space and freedom to be

I have to say, I fell in love with this place
Rise, shine, fall and don’t leave a trace
Run and dance, each day a faster pace
Tomorrow no one will remember your face

Turn round the corner, take the last train home
Take an umbrella and don’t forget your phone
Hurry, my sister, this ain’t a place for you
This city will lie and you’ll believe it’s true

I say, this city never sleeps, sister
Not the store at the corner, not the church down the road
The darker it gets the louder they whisper
And every night, they’ll sink another boat
Oh dear, I've been mostly active on tumblr, lately, and neglected dA, didn't I.

The main inspiration for this piece is a half-remembered line from a song I cannot seem to be able to identify, it goes like "Turn round the corner, take the last train home" or something like that. Maybe one of you knows it?

As might be noticeable in some places, the song 'Leaving tonight' by The Birthday Massacre played in my head while I wrote this / tried to get a hang on the tune. .._.."

on tumblr

~SulZala
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AngelaJenkinson Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think it's great.  For me though, from a musician's p.o.v. the 5th verse goes slightly out of rhythm to the rest of the poem .. or is this just me reading it wrong?
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SulZala Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That's probably because that's the verse where another song started interfering with the writing process. Not too happy with it myself ::/ But I'm glad you like the rest ::3
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AngelaJenkinson Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ah .. I hate it when that happens lol ... but it's still a great piece of work so well done :)
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